War does not turn a blind eye to women and children. It does not favor a color, gender, or class. It includes those who participate in it and those who are forced to live around it. War does not leave the innocent alone to live in peace. Warfare takes those who are virtuous and those who are immoral, it does not care if you have a PHD or a family. It does not care if you have saved a life or have hurt people. It does not look for those who deserve to live or die, it just takes without giving. War has changed the lives of many soldiers and civilians. For instance in the picture above it shows a small town in Vietnam that has been caught in the cross fires of a battle. It shows a portion of the town and how bodies are left on the streets. In towns around Vietnam, bodies fill the streets and the stench of death accompany them.
(http://www.notbeinggoverned.com/deaths-nations-since-ww-ii-due-us-interventions/)
I like your thesis statement in how it grabs the readers attention and poses questions for the reader. Additionally, I liked how stylistically you outlined the specific ways that war affects many different groups of people at the beginning. The line, "it does not care if you have a PHD or a family" is really eye opening in posing the question for the reader, "What is really important in life?". To me, this really showed the enormous affects and many different methods of affects that war has on everyone involved. Overall, very insightful!
ReplyDeleteYou're thesis is really strong; it's simple, covers a broad idea and has a lot of potential. You brought up excellent points when you said "Warfare takes those who are virtuous and those who are immoral... it just takes without giving". You have a good picture and you explained it well, but I feel that if you added more pictures further demonstrating how war is blind, it would have made your argument much stronger. Other than that,it's a good job!
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